blue skies
caught in each raindrop
an inverted cloud
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6 comments:
First, it came up as paradoxial..then there's a surreal quality to it..good haiku, David :)
wishes,
devika
A evocative haiku, Dave. Lovit...
Took me hours to find out: it's true.
Best wishes
Ralf
a little editing - I have added the word "caught" and I am currently considering alternatives for "blue skies"
thanks for the comments, guys!
Love the haiku.
Not sure if you need "caught" although it does help the middle line length.
I do like "blue skies" but look forward to what you might replace it with, out of pure interest, and seeing a haiku go through its often many versions.
all my best,
Alan
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