micropoetry by david serjeant
First, it came up as paradoxial..then there's a surreal quality to it..good haiku, David :)wishes, devika
A evocative haiku, Dave. Lovit...
Took me hours to find out: it's true.Best wishesRalf
a little editing - I have added the word "caught" and I am currently considering alternatives for "blue skies"
thanks for the comments, guys!
Love the haiku.Not sure if you need "caught" although it does help the middle line length.I do like "blue skies" but look forward to what you might replace it with, out of pure interest, and seeing a haiku go through its often many versions.all my best,AlanWith Words.
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