distant lightning

14 January 2010

streetlights -
at the window your silhouette
watches the snow

Devika Jyothi said...: very nice image, David :)

wishes,
devika; 14 January 2010 at 12:24
Frank... said...: A very atmospheric image David. I love silhouette haiku...; 15 January 2010 at 10:15
old pajamas said...: David,

This is a very nice poem, but you could cut two syllables and it would be better. Thank you...; 17 January 2010 at 05:37
Dave Serjeant said...: thanks for the comments - not one of my best, though.

OP - after posting, I realised I needed to cut the word "fall" to give the piece some rhythm. It's an un-necessary word anyway.; 17 January 2010 at 09:54