14 January 2010

streetlights -
at the window your silhouette
watches the snow

4 comments:

Devika said...

very nice image, David :)

wishes,
devika

Frank Williams said...

A very atmospheric image David. I love silhouette haiku...

old pajamas said...

David,

This is a very nice poem, but you could cut two syllables and it would be better. Thank you...

Dave Serjeant said...

thanks for the comments - not one of my best, though.

OP - after posting, I realised I needed to cut the word "fall" to give the piece some rhythm. It's an un-necessary word anyway.

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