micropoetry by david serjeant
Sunday league match a swallow skims and twists the penalty box
Wondered if this might be an improvement on yesterday's post.
I prefer the original, perhaps with lines 2 & 3 reversed. Either way, what's not to like: birds and football in the same haiku. Marvellous. :-)
Sunday league pitcha swallow twists and turnsinches above the box
Hi Matthew. I remember your stadium tour pigeon. That has to be the ultimate bird/football haiku.
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Wondered if this might be an improvement on yesterday's post.
I prefer the original, perhaps with lines 2 & 3 reversed. Either way, what's not to like: birds and football in the same haiku. Marvellous. :-)
Sunday league pitch
a swallow twists and turns
inches above the box
Hi Matthew. I remember your stadium tour pigeon. That has to be the ultimate bird/football haiku.
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